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lori99320
01-18-2014, 01:57 PM
I think I like this, but I'm wondering if the background is too faded? Or is it the tree and canoe are too strong? Any comments or suggestions are very welcome!

jmac
01-18-2014, 05:22 PM
Hello Lori. Welcome to the forum. I'm not sure I qualify to critique but here are a few thoughts. First, I think you have created a nice sense of distance with the fading background. I'm not particularly bothered by the contrast with the foreground. And you have also created a brilliant light in the sky. There are a couple things that bother me when looking at the work compositionally. The dark area in front of the dock doesn't read well for me. I'm not sure what it represents. While you have a strong light source the tree is not casting a shadow and also because of the strong light from behind and right of the boat I would expect there to be more shadow where the boat meets the ground. And last instead of having the lake end at the tree trunk you might consider continuing it a little behind and to the left of the tree.

I'm being kind of nit-pisky probably but those are my thoughts on what is a nice painting. I'm sure there are others here who can offer a more educated perspective.

lori99320
01-18-2014, 07:24 PM
Thank you so much jmac! That is just the kind of feedback I was looking for, looking at the painting and what your impressions are! The dark area in front of the dock was supposed to be a path, but now that I've taken it out I can see it was just a distracting muddy mess. I took your suggestions and here is how it looks now...I think it is more pleasing to the eye. At least it is to me. Thanks again!!

jmac
01-18-2014, 08:54 PM
Wow! I think that looks very nice...One small thing...Again because of your strong light source you might consider darkening the shadow under the dock. It would help anchor it and make it look more like it is above the water rather than floating on it.

You handled that area in front of the dock very well and the boat is much more integrated into the scene. Extending the lake beyond the tree trunk gives the eye some place to leave the painting and come back in. Nicely done!

lori99320
01-19-2014, 09:32 AM
Again...thanks so much for your feedback jmac, it was extremely helpful. So I think I'm finished with this one now.

stevemawmv
01-19-2014, 09:06 PM
Hello Lori,
I've watched your progress and agree with our friend Jmac,"wow" your tweeks have
resulted in a well balanced and nicely painted landscape...
Along with your improvements you've also done a great job on the boat slants and the distant treeline. You were well advised with his
suggestions.
Again, nicely done!
Steve

elainep
01-21-2014, 01:48 AM
I agree with all of the above. I like the soft, less contrasty background gives depth to your painting.

lori99320
01-21-2014, 07:32 PM
Thank you so much stevemawmv! Yes, jmac had some wonderful suggestions. Nothing like a different pair of eyes to get some fresh insight.

Thanks elainep!

NickBussy
01-28-2014, 10:36 AM
Nice to see the development process. Good response and result! Well done

Danny Greene
02-05-2014, 09:53 AM
I like it very much.
The only thing I would say is that one the left bottom corner, I feel it should be a little darker. :)
D.

Elena
02-07-2014, 06:52 AM
I like the improved version very much.
It has such calm and eery feeling.
I think you captured a warm autumn day perfectly!

As for feedback - I think you already got some brilliant advices and suggestions here..
I may not be the most qualified person to give comments/suggestions on other people`s paintings, because I have a tendency to paint based on my instinct rather than knowledge :o, , nonetheless, here are my thoughts: I would add even more shadow on the water under the dock and maybe some more warmth to the water in that area, perhaps more color. Somehow, the right bottom corner feels too light and too bright in comparison to the whole painting.

Oh, and I would add a flying bird (or two) somewhere in the middle part of the painting, I feel like it would add more dynamism to the whole composition ... but that`s just my personal opinion :)
Hope my feedback was somewhat helpful to you...
Wish you lots of luck and inspiration!

Elena

My blog: www.elenahasnas.weebly.com

lori99320
02-07-2014, 05:49 PM
Gosh, this is great...thanks again for all the suggestions. Again, I've taken what you've said to heart and changed the painting. See what you think....

hildee
04-14-2014, 08:15 PM
It's a lovely painting and a lot of work has gone into it. Beautiful colour too.

The only thing I feel is the boat kind of stops me going further into that part of the painting and my eye does want to follow the tree up and over and into the painting. Maybe it's the angle of the boat, it joins up with the pier and makes a straight line, blocks it. Just how I see it though :)

Victor Osaka
04-15-2014, 05:40 AM
Outstanding work. The added detail really makes me want to dive in and look at it close up.

BetsyPriesing
05-18-2014, 03:43 AM
Nice improvements to the painting. It looks great!

I would like to see the far waterline/tree land mass a bit straighter. It looks a bit wobbly to me. Somewhere in the mass area I feel, would benefit from a continuous straighter horizon line?

Lovely painting as it is though.
Betsy