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barnburner
11-09-2010, 01:45 AM
Thanks to Sandra for allowing me to borrow and deteriorate her pic for the mother in the vision.. :)

For most of her life, Mariska had heard a few members of the tribe talk about having a "vision". She never quite knew whether to take the stories seriously or not. Never had she experienced one...until tonight.
With a small fire reflecting heat off the wall of her Father's lodge taking away the chill, Mariska slept soundly. Then, sometime in the early morning, she sensed, more than saw or heard, her Mother coming to her in a vision. “Mariska, Mariska, You are in great danger. The men that killed me and took you prisoner, are coming back to capture you again. These men are horribly angry that you made them look foolish by escaping, and spoiling their horrible plans for you. They intend to hide and wait for a moment when you will be unprotected. It is then they will make their move. You must tell your father, and let him take steps to stop them. My daughter, these are truly evil men. You must not be taken again. You must not..You must not..” and then she was gone.
When the sun came up that morning, Mariska told Sean her story. Quickly, they went straight to her father, and passed it along to him. Looking hard into Tiganche's eyes, Sean said,
“I do not know if she had a vision or a dream, but we cannot take a chance. Until we know for sure what we are dealing with, you can't afford to pull warriors off hunting.
Winter is almost here, and we need a lot more meat. I am the one that can best be spared. They will almost certainly come down the north trail. I will find a good spot and ambush them. If there are only the two men, I can take one of them out before they even know I'm there, then I will have a good chance to kill
the other one. Just in case, why don't you send someone to
watch the south trail? If they do come that way, he can warn the village, and you can take a few warriors and get them before they can get here. Should I not return in four days, you will
know I have failed, and you can then send your warriors to track them down and kill them. Mariska must never be threatened by them again."
Quickly Sean gathered what he needed, and started out the door of the lodge, only to find it blocked by Mariska..
"I will not ask you to not go, because I know I cannot not stop you", said Mariska as they looked into each other's eyes. “ Just be very careful, and come back." With a touch of humor in her voice, Mariska said, "My father grows weary of my company in his lodge, and wishes me to have a husband. If you don't come back, I will have to go to Little Wolf... So unless you want that – make sure you return”.
Flashing a grin, and kissing her quickly, Sean starts at a trot towards the North Trail, trying his best to push Mariska out of his mind. "For what I have to do, anything less than a clear mind could be fatal, and I'll be damned if I'm going to help Little Wolf!"

Alexandra
11-09-2010, 03:50 AM
I am loving your story Mike.....I just have one crit though. Fade that ugly face in the background out a bit.:eek::rolleyes::p

barnburner
11-09-2010, 04:02 AM
I am loving your story Mike.....I just have one crit though. Fade that ugly face in the background out a bit.:eek::rolleyes::p

Well, if I fade that beautiful face out a bit, then you will have to reduce your modeling fee accordingly... :):)

I'm so glad you are enjoying the story. I truly appreciate it. :)

AT-TA
11-09-2010, 06:29 AM
So the plot is thickennig and i must say, i have not noticed the face in the background, but recognised it in dreaming Mariska...in the main picture.
Good writing, Barney!

javier
11-09-2010, 06:42 AM
Barnburner great job, personally when I'm reading this in my head sounds like the voice of Orson Wells.:):):)

barnburner
11-09-2010, 08:01 AM
So the plot is thickennig and i must say, i have not noticed the face in the background, but recognised it in dreaming Mariska...in the main picture.
Good writing, Barney!

Thanks AT... I appreciate it very much. :)

barnburner
11-09-2010, 08:03 AM
Barnburner great job, personally when I'm reading this in my head sounds like the voice of Orson Wells.:):):)

LOL...well... I've put on a few pounds, but thankfully,
not in the Orson Wells class (yet)... :D
Javier, thank you for the very kind comments. Truly appreciated. :)

coops
11-09-2010, 08:29 AM
This story just gets better and better Barnburner. Love the painting and how wonderful to see Alexandra there. Its a great painting:)

Caesar
11-09-2010, 09:29 AM
Sean plan looks quite risky. Which training does he have to be sure to easily neutralize two bandits?
Your sleeping figure drawing is really good here and Sandra is perfect as a Mohegan too (although she's from another tribe:D).

barnburner
11-09-2010, 10:09 AM
This story just gets better and better Barnburner. Love the painting and how wonderful to see Alexandra there. Its a great painting:)

Thank you so much Coops.. I appreciate you kind comments very much. :)

barnburner
11-09-2010, 10:16 AM
Sean plan looks quite risky. Which training does he have to be sure to easily neutralize two bandits?
Your sleeping figure drawing is really good here and Sandra is perfect as a Mohegan too (although she's from another tribe:D).

Any sort of combat involves risk, but before leaving for the wars the last time, Sean's father taught him much about combat tactics, self-defense, fencing,etc..,
not to mention how much strength Sean has added as a result of the things he has had to deal with.
If you take out one of the two individuals from ambush, then it' just a matter of one on one, and if you strike quickly enough - the advantage always lies with the attacker. As Sean's father told him many times...
"Even outnumbered, there is always a way to attack...
Find a way to take the initiative - attack - attack - attack!"
Thank you Caesar for the very kind comments. Very much appreciated... :):)

justjean
11-09-2010, 01:29 PM
Thans Barn , great reading and great paintings to go along with it :D

barnburner
11-09-2010, 04:24 PM
Thans Barn , great reading and great paintings to go along with it :D

Jean, I am really glad that you are enjoying the story and the paintings. Thank you for the kind words, and
the attention. I appreciate it. :)

Jasminek
11-16-2010, 01:44 AM
It is getting better and better. I wish there were more American Indian stories, do you know any writers of our time who are American Indians?

Finally caught up the story so far, well done.!:D

barnburner
11-16-2010, 03:45 AM
It is getting better and better. I wish there were more American Indian stories, do you know any writers of our time who are American Indians?

Finally caught up the story so far, well done.!:D

I'm sure there are many fine Native American writers, but I don't know of any by name, altho some well known authors had at least some Native American heritage.
Thanks for reading/viewing my little story. I truly appreciate it. :)